Saturday, April 20, 2013

Day 16: pantun

Today's prompt from the NaPoWriMo blog was to write a pantun which is a traditional Malay form of rhymed a-b-a-b quatrains of eight to twelve syllables per line. Traditionally, the the images of the first two lines and the second two lines may be metaphorically linked but generally not logically. In keeping with my issues with both rhyming and structured poetry, I had a bit of trouble with this one. The page before me has three lines scribbled out then another two, one, one, one and two lines... all furiously scribbled over before I finally came up with the following:

The Wake
Midday sun my shadow shrinking
Light upon the water hurts my eyes.
Holding up the bar, the men are drinking
Suburban pub under suburban skies.


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